Thank you for your application to Lost Raiders. The mod team has decided to ask for revisions on the following:
Your personality section is much more of a history section that tells us about what happens in canon rather than the character's personality. Please revise to give us a better idea of the layers of his personality, how he generally acts and how he presents himself, and what his motivations are. In addition, you have not made clear which part of this character is an AU from canon, so please also include specifics on that.
Your sample objectives are also lacking the OOC explanation that shows us your OOC reasoning behind why you chose them. Please add these explanations to that section.
Please reply to this comment with your revisions and have them completed by 11:59 PM EST on Monday, 03/27.
REVISION
Thank you for your application to Lost Raiders. The mod team has decided to ask for revisions on the following:
Your personality section is much more of a history section that tells us about what happens in canon rather than the character's personality. Please revise to give us a better idea of the layers of his personality, how he generally acts and how he presents himself, and what his motivations are. In addition, you have not made clear which part of this character is an AU from canon, so please also include specifics on that.
Your sample objectives are also lacking the OOC explanation that shows us your OOC reasoning behind why you chose them. Please add these explanations to that section.
Please reply to this comment with your revisions and have them completed by 11:59 PM EST on Monday, 03/27.
We look forward to hearing back from you!